Reflection on Project 2 Draft

This blog post will look at the drafts I read for the last post ( Swati's draft and Victoria's draft.) and compare them to my own. Admittedly, I have had a very busy few weeks and have not had time to write a very complete draft yet. I will fix this very soon.

Mancini, Anderson. "Reflection" November 19th, 2008
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Do you have an identifiable thesis?
Yes. While it is not as strong as Swati's intro and thesis, there is a a direct claim I am making about my paper. It needs more strength and detail added to it and should be more "explicit".

How have you decided to organize your essay?
 My organization is very similar to Victoria's and Swati's. I chose for each paragraph to have a specific discussion of a device my author used. By organizing it by rhetorical device, it keeps a flow to it that avoid confusion.

Did you identify and analyze several important elements of the text's rhetorical situation?
 My elements are identified, but as of right now my draft is still basically in the "outline" phase. To be on par with the other essays I have read, I need to add much more analysis and thought to my text.

Did you explain how these strategies were employed?
Roughly, yes. My outline has "evidence" attached to each of my arguments. Swati did a very good job of just looking at what the author did to reach their audience and how they used their rhetorical devices, and I should look to her paper for some guidance.

Are you thoughtfully using evidence?
 Look above. My paper needs a lot more thought. Both Swati and Victoria did a fairly careful analysis of how the evidence was used to create a point.

Do you leave your reader wanting more?
I would say yes. Right now because my draft is very very rough. Half-jokes aside, Swati's paper definitely wanted to make me read more about her topic and field. Mine is weak, but hopefully can garner the audience's interest.